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    dots Submission Name: Sweet Nothingsdots

    Author: Maverique
    ASL Info:    25/F/Own little world
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 438/478/128
    Words: 24
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsSweet Nothingsdots

    You wrap up whispered words
    into pretty little packages
    bursting with nothingness:
    silver-tongued gifts
    as empty as your promises

    Submitted on 2008-01-16 08:10:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was delightful! I wanted it to be longer!!!
    | Posted on 2008-02-23 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      so little words but speaks a volume of truth and honesty from within ones self

    i liked it well done

    | Posted on 2008-01-17 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      The middle line is sort of weak, perhaps you would like to re-write it. Overall the poem was short and sweet. Shakespeare once said that "Brevity is the soul of wit".
    Why meaningless swivel around, when you can express a feeling in a few words, like you did here. :)
    | Posted on 2008-01-16 00:00:00 | by moaxcym | [ Reply to This ]

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