Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Sweet Nothingsdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Maverique
    ASL Info:    25/F/Own little world
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 438/478/128
    Words: 24
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 984
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 233



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsSweet Nothingsdots
    -------------------------------------------


    You wrap up whispered words
    into pretty little packages
    bursting with nothingness:
    silver-tongued gifts
    as empty as your promises




    Submitted on 2008-01-16 08:10:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      This was delightful! I wanted it to be longer!!!
    | Posted on 2008-02-23 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      so little words but speaks a volume of truth and honesty from within ones self

    i liked it well done

    sandman
    | Posted on 2008-01-17 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      The middle line is sort of weak, perhaps you would like to re-write it. Overall the poem was short and sweet. Shakespeare once said that "Brevity is the soul of wit".
    Why meaningless swivel around, when you can express a feeling in a few words, like you did here. :)
    | Posted on 2008-01-16 00:00:00 | by moaxcym | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    156044

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    I will call out your name written by RisingSon
    Skin of Fables written by ShadowParadox
    new moon written by CrypticBard
    Life changes in a moment written by Ramneet
    Bee Keeper written by endlessgame23
    Love Can Be... written by HAVENSMITH92
    In the Mouth of Elysium written by HisNameIsNoMore
    You Make Me speechless written by elephantasia
    cleverly shunned written by CrypticBard
    untitled written by Chelebel
    Red Barn written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Hollow Points written by RequiemOfDreams
    Push written by JanePlane
    Song written by Daniel Barlow
    102.3 written by rev.jpfadeproof
    4th Season of Vivaldi written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Treasure Chest written by PieceOfCake
    To the King written by HisNameIsNoMore
    May 31 2018 written by Chelebel
    Pain, an elixir. written by Ramneet
    It's Night Now written by RisingSon
    Sunset written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Munyonyo written by expiring_touch
    Ten Poems written by Wolfwatching
    Trails written by Daniel Barlow
    This written by Chelebel
    To written by SavedDragon
    Wavelength written by saartha
    Once Again written by krs3332003
    In the end written by Janesaddiction

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry