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    dots Submission Name: Heartbreakdots
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    Author: Kaygrl
    ASL Info:    18/female/Washington
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 138/133/124
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 91
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    dotsHeartbreakdots
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    Broken promises,
    And stupid lies,
    So why do I,
    Miss you so much?

    Do you know,
    How hard it was for me?
    Do you really think,
    You are the only one hurting,

    Well maybe you shoukld open your eyes,
    Take a look around and see,
    The pain,
    The sadness,
    Shadowed in mine own eyes,

    I didn't want to end it,
    But some things you can't erase,
    Do you see the look i give you?
    Do you see the expression on my face?

    Look at me!
    Look at me deep,
    And see what i did,
    Was for a reason,

    But you closed your mind,
    Closed your ears,
    To my voice of reason,
    So i had to make you see,
    Tell me,
    Do you see now?




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