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    Author: vampirefreak69
    Elite Ratio:    2.19 - 30/99/82
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    You would think I'd learned my lesson,
    put my heart out for the last time. . .
    You ripped me to shreds without trying,
    ground my soul into bloodied dust.

    Yet, just the sight of your name
    stirs those passions I tried to resist.
    How many ways can a person be a fool?
    More ways than I ever thought possible.

    I sit by a phone that does not ring.
    I stare at its sterile plastic shell.
    Knowing it will not fill this void with
    the voice I love more than life itself.

    Where does a wounded heart go to die?
    You threw me away again and again without
    even knowing the wounds you inflicted,
    without caring about the hurt I felt.

    Foolish woman, I sit here, sick and pale,
    trying to find a way to cope with the
    sorrow that is burning me to ashes,
    blown away in a wind carrying no remorse.




    Submitted on 2008-01-16 23:25:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Unfortunately,
    I think this piece can hit anyone home. It's a tragic part of life, I like the honesty :) But just know some time from now u will look back at this particular post and say "what was I thinking?" "I didn't need this person!" I look forward to reading more...
    | Posted on 2008-01-31 00:00:00 | by metallichick786 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is sad, and sounds so much like so many true stories that it can connect to almost any reader. It is a bit more mainstream styled than the last piece of yours that I read, but that ability to be move freely between styles and genres is such a gift. I really enjoyed this. I just wish things weren't so sad.

    xoxo
    | Posted on 2008-01-18 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]


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