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    dots Submission Name: Magic Sequence: Bluedots
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    Author: Porcelaine
    ASL Info:    21/F/Croatia
    Elite Ratio:    3.83 - 850/651/234
    Words: 166
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsMagic Sequence: Bluedots
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    I am Blue

    The grids of my fate show impossible to see
    As is the place where water meets sky
    Yet the vision is as a sapphire is
    Thus are my eyes…always open but never of any other color
    Then of cold that shivers through my blood

    I am Blue

    My lips are wine…they turn to poison when they're bitten
    But the sour-most venom is of frost-laced heart I carry
    Here in this place where my body turns
    Into a fantasy of crystals that can heal, hurt or renew
    Anyone but me

    I am Blue

    Unearthly as the tides that make me weary when the might
    Escapes my body to tend to someone else
    So when I lie to dream
    I lie on naked ground where mind is out of consciousness,
    The flowers grow indigo and all I know is…

    Blue…




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      I really liked this! Gives "blue" such emotion and such a real personality; exactly as the one "blue" would have. You had great imagery and great flow. Good write!
    | Posted on 2008-01-20 00:00:00 | by TheStillSilence | [ Reply to This ]
      Aaaah, blue; much regaled as the color of Sea and Sky, but forgotten as the color of Melancholy! Intriguing and mysterious this, but beguiling as the color "Blue"!!
    | Posted on 2008-01-19 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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