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    dots Submission Name: Until Nowdots
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    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Misc/Depressed
    Total Views: 572
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    dotsUntil Nowdots
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    Come,
    Berate me,
    Break me,
    Down,
    Come
    It’s too late,
    To save me,
    Now

    Let your pity,
    Your sorrow,
    Wash away,
    Have none left,
    For me,
    Either way,
    I don’t want,
    To…drag
    You down,
    Somehow…


    Feel nothing,
    For me, you,
    Can even laugh,
    Or find some,
    Way to,
    Distract,
    Your feelings,
    For… me
    Somehow,
    Somehow…

    -You were right-
    Up until this moment,
    -I never realized, you are-
    My main component,
    -You are my only way home-
    -You were right-,
    Up until this moment
    -I never realized, you are-,
    My main component,
    And I’ve never been alone
    Until now…

    I whisper until now…




    Submitted on 2008-01-17 08:18:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was great...I love the flow of it, feels like the person is slowly falling apart, piece by piece. And in teh end, they're trying to realize what got them to this point, and they do, but it doesn't help, it doesn't take away the pain.
    | Posted on 2008-01-24 00:00:00 | by TheStillSilence | [ Reply to This ]


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