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    dots Submission Name: lormal nifedots
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    Author: to-wit
    Elite Ratio:    0.59 - 27/148/488
    Words: 37
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotslormal nifedots
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    traffic large
    im in charge
    see the sarge?
    he busted large on one these
    and can we please get some quiet?
    riot!!!!!
    thats a cop
    and thats why i shop
    for guns
    want one?
    come get some




    Submitted on 2008-01-17 08:42:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      huh,i thought it more an anti cop,cop killing theme.maybe.
    | Posted on 2008-01-18 00:00:00 | by to-wit | [ Reply to This ]
      
    This kind of sounds like the supper highway, you know the one that not being built to the Mexican boarder. The one that is insanely huge, the one the NWO conspiracists suspect is suspect.
    | Posted on 2008-01-18 00:00:00 | by Andz | [ Reply to This ]
      I particularly am not fond of the whole rhyming scheme...it just seems so--forced. This write was a good try, but it feels rushed somehow. Perhaps you could try to revise it?

    Then again, it could also be that I am not favoring rhyme.

    ~Steph.
    | Posted on 2008-01-17 00:00:00 | by xXCptn_SephyXx | [ Reply to This ]


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