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    dots Submission Name: Sacred Parkdots

    Author: Katlord
    ASL Info:    24/no thanks/my room
    Elite Ratio:    2.17 - 375/199/101
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       I wrote this the other day.. I'm tired of everyone trying to make me happy... Why can't they just leave me alone?.. Enjoy

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    dotsSacred Parkdots

    Leave me be, let me cry,
    I know a place that is warm and dry.
    Let me fade into the dark,
    Beyond all sight is my hidden park.

    All the flowers here are crushed,
    In this place Iím never rushed.
    All the trees here are dead,
    I shift my eyes to look ahead.

    I wish to be alone you see,
    To, have everything away from me.
    To a place to worship thoughts,
    To mourn the love that has been lost.

    I hurt no one by hiding here,
    Not a soul shall shed a tear.
    Here is where I want to stay,
    Never being lead astray.

    Submitted on 2008-01-17 09:40:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Beautifully written as should be expected from you. the rhymes are effortless, the flow almost divine, the vocabulary perfect. your poetry is always a good read.
    | Posted on 2008-01-28 00:00:00 | by Hazy skies | [ Reply to This ]
      We all have moments of craving for perfect solitude - to reflect, become pensive and lost in thought. The easy rhythm of your poem makes it a pleasure to read and you rhyme without the obvious effort of some people... I it hate when it comes across contrived and this is far from it!

    Well written - I really enjoyed it.
    | Posted on 2008-01-24 00:00:00 | by Beulah | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, i really liked this poem. it created great imagery, and i could hear the lines in italics as whispers. very well written, very good!
    | Posted on 2008-01-17 00:00:00 | by Kaygrl | [ Reply to This ]
      WOW, i know these types of poems are used a lot. but this poem made the idea new for me. I Love it. it really made me think. I will be wanting to read more of your poems, if they are as good as this one.

    | Posted on 2008-01-17 00:00:00 | by WhY-dO-yOu-CrY | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey sweetie, This is a great piece.
    | Posted on 2008-01-17 00:00:00 | by Depression420 | [ Reply to This ]

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