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    dots Submission Name: Starlingdots
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    Author: WolfStar
    ASL Info:    26/F/California
    Elite Ratio:    6.85 - 119/130/46
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsStarlingdots
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    How the jesses let down the dove,
    not meant for long journeys,
    too gentle for such perilous heights.

    A battered wing, a broken feather
    lay on the ground
    for micelings and famboys to gather
    for nests and crooked pirates' hats,
    for magic wands and whispered wind-wishes
    girl-children chant before bed.

    A little boy never knows
    as he chases the sparrow,
    as the first wings of promise beat;
    Delilah leaves a sigh
    where the starling had lived
    as she watches the window
    for something to arrive.

    You will never know, my love,
    the downdrafts I have tumbled;
    only the wands and whispers,
    the dreams that now linger,
    the sensation of your cheek
    against the waiting windowpane.

    The little boy never knows.




    Submitted on 2008-01-17 19:52:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this one, it has a secret meaning that makes you think; and when you find it, you have learned something you'd never thought about before. I liked the beginning:
    "Too gentle for such perilous heights
    a battered wing, a broken feather
    lay on the ground."
    Nice write

    | Posted on 2008-01-17 00:00:00 | by dancer-of-words | [ Reply to This ]


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