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    dots Submission Name: your shadows blood upon medots

    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsyour shadows blood upon medots

    & amber structures,
    inside eyes glanced,
    your blue orbs fire bright
    inside august moon
    of lovers tongues delight.

    & sea change brings
    a coloured ribbon
    of fingers tap
    to knees of spring
    like tiger lillies
    floral cap.

    grave a little closer
    to my glistered honeyed cheek
    to sleep.
    may misty wild rock leap
    be further pushed
    along the aged mossy creek.

    sun peels
    the gilly luster of spit
    to split wide
    the oceans mouth.
    while the forests furry lips
    untangle its sunken ships
    a little further south.

    my skin
    is for your removing
    & for the disproving
    of your shadows blood upon me.
    & inside your mind
    the trees unwind
    the ghostly lungs
    of evening.

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      hopeful yet gloomy. i like that mish-mash/push-pull dynamic in poetry, in life in general, i think. but i'm funny like that.

    this reminds me of the dance of the seasons, the split lip of a toddler taking his/her first step... only to fall... and get back up again. resilience. rhythmic stillness.

    | Posted on 2008-01-21 00:00:00 | by silent strings | [ Reply to This ]

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