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Submission Name: Five Years dots

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Author:	blu_kittin
ASL Info:	18/F/The Emerald City
Elite Ratio:	6.16 - 693/385/203
Words:	103

Class/Type:	Prose/Nostalgia
Total Views:	265
Average Vote:	3.5000
Bytes:	658

Description:
This was part of a journal. Not sure why I decided to post it. I guess I just wanted to hear some opinions.

Five Years dots

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five years. five years of mistakes and regrets and hurts and laughs and friends and memories and moves.
five years of dreams and wishes and love and hope.
five years of wanting, and when i find it i give it away.
five years of caring, until i just dont care anymore
five years.
feels more like five minutes
feels more like five hundred

five years i can't erase
five months i wouldnt if i could

five years that are more beautiful and painful than anyone could know

five years that are almost over.
too soon
forever gone
five years.

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  You sound way bummed in this poem? Whats up?
You are happy most of the time.
Kelley Frost
| Posted on 2008-04-16 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
  the past is something you cannot erase, or forget. but you cannot dwell in it. mistakes are made. things happen. but if you can still look onto the future, and keep one foot in front of the other, you'll be moving along, to make something of yourself down the road, if you haven't already.

Friends are the hardest things to let go. but sometimes the easiest. if you learn to let go of friends that don't want to be your friend anymore, than it will be easier than dwelling on them, and wishing that they were still here.
| Posted on 2008-01-30 00:00:00 | by Dragonslayer | [ Reply to This ]
  Nicely and deftly done...interesting insight. this journal entry made me think of William Blake:

To see a World in a Grain of Sand
And a Heaven in a Wild Flower,
Hold Infinity in the palm of your hand
And Eternity in an hour.

Michael
| Posted on 2008-01-28 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
  Reminiscence is common to us all, and we can't help but go back through the years. This had a haunting quality about it though, as though the five years were normal but also unusual and especial! I like the mood it evoked; five years; five precious years, lived, and never to be lived again!!
| Posted on 2008-01-27 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
  It is good to think about things past and look to the future but truly, to live in NOW - make this moment the best & forget the rest....we all make mistakes and memories good and bad but never live with regret - just BE!

I think it's great that you express yourself in a journal and better that you share

love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles to share
tif
| Posted on 2008-01-25 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  Nice stuff here!

A superbly crafted poem, with power, passion and pain.

Indeed, a lot of things can happen to a person in a five year period.

I glad you got through it all, without serious damage.

However, writing poetry allows us the freedom to escape reality and express greater possibilities

As long as you learned important facts, about your life's journey, then you might choose a less traveled road in the future.

We all need assurance to stay focus to complete our goals.

You have to remove doubt and fear to fly and achieve it

Life is that drama on an emotional roller coaster ride

You must know when and where to jump off
| Posted on 2008-01-24 00:00:00 | by FireFly747 | [ Reply to This ]
  You made me remember the five years from my twelfth ... so I think this is a successful poem!
| Posted on 2008-01-21 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
  five years....gosh thats a long time by then ill have graduated and be living in japan;or ill be on the street a hobo living in a cardboard box with no power....

[censored] the Future(excuse my french)

no but back to your writing i know you dont want to her this especially since this is personal (i know how you feel) and important to you but i have a feeling if you put this into a few/severa; stanzas and put a litte rythm in it it would make a world of change

BUT one thing i did like about your poem was that it made me think it made me think about my life and in FIVE YEARS for now will i be sitting there thinking about all the mistakes and all the things ive done and 50 years thats a heck of a long time!

thanks for the read
-the girl who cried wolf to much

| Posted on 2008-01-18 00:00:00 | by BlueTorcher | [ Reply to This ]

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