i like it ess. but i think you seriously need to steer vlear of writining things as paragraphs you need to put some breathing space in it to give a more dramatice effect. and people are mean and nasty. why should we be all the same and what is considered normal? xxx
Why do they distrust the followers of dark.The ones who chose to be differnt like me.They fear our attiudes toward life and jugde our feelings.They compare us to who were not and wan'ts us to be the same.Differents displease them attiudes angry them our way confuse them they won't ever understand
rewritten to correct grammatical errors....
Why do they distrust the followers of dark? The ones who choose to be different like me. They fear our attitudes toward life and judge our feelings. They compare us to who we're not and want us all to be the same. Differences displease them, attitudes anger them, our ways confuse them....
They won't ever understand.
you should use that as a journal, you have a few spelling mistakes....
"Why do they distrust the followers of dark.The ones who chose to be [different] like me.They fear our [attitudes] toward life and [judge] our feelings.They compare us to who were not and [wants] us to be the same.[Different] displease them [attitudes] angry them our way confuse them they won't ever understand.
some Grammar could be used differently but on the whole i kinda see what you mean.
I understand exactly what you are saying in this write
So many times peoplethink there is something wrong with a teenager just because they are a little different
I personally think its extremely important for a teenage to express themselves
We must remember a person only has one youth and once they lose it and venture into adulthood its lost forever and sadly if its lost to quick a person will spend their wholelife trying to recapture it
When I was your age I was very goth and listenend to an incredible amount of goth music and wore goth clothes
Remember though Goth music was extremely different in my time then the Goth culture today
but still the circumstances where the same as back then I was just a teen trying to express my inner self
I thought you expressed yourself good in this
Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
WELCOME TO ELITE SKILLS!!!!!!!!!!!