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    dots Submission Name: Differentdots

    Author: essence of life
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 33/38/21
    Words: 59
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Why do they distrust the followers of dark.

    The ones who chose to be differnt like me.

    They fear our attiudes toward life and jugde our feelings.

    They compare us to who were not and wan'ts us to be the same.

    Differents displease them attiudes angry them our way confuse them they won't ever understand

    Submitted on 2008-01-18 17:44:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like it ess. but i think you seriously need to steer vlear of writining things as paragraphs you need to put some breathing space in it to give a more dramatice effect. and people are mean and nasty. why should we be all the same and what is considered normal? xxx
    | Posted on 2008-08-07 00:00:00 | by broken heart | [ Reply to This ]
      Why do they distrust the followers of dark.The ones who chose to be differnt like me.They fear our attiudes toward life and jugde our feelings.They compare us to who were not and wan'ts us to be the same.Differents displease them attiudes angry them our way confuse them they won't ever understand

    rewritten to correct grammatical errors....

    Why do they distrust the followers of dark? The ones who choose to be different like me. They fear our attitudes toward life and judge our feelings. They compare us to who we're not and want us all to be the same. Differences displease them, attitudes anger them, our ways confuse them....
    They won't ever understand.

    cleaned up, it would be a really great piece.
    | Posted on 2008-07-31 00:00:00 | by was_i_ever_real | [ Reply to This ]
      Essy. Very original. Reminds me of a song or something. Something. Def. something.

    I'd like to see some poetic ...style...if you know what you mean. However, I feel your message. Its true and to the point. I can relate to it as I assume many others will and can.

    I look forward to reading more of your writes in the future.

    | Posted on 2008-07-30 00:00:00 | by SweetAndOhSoME | [ Reply to This ]
      Ess, Again, give it time. AND USE SPELL CHECK!

    People are narrowminded [censored]s.
    People Suck.
    People are the pits.

    Never let anyone tell you that you are subpar becaue your different. Your freaking AWESOME.

    | Posted on 2008-07-24 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]
      thats pretty cool ess. me likes. good job. i see what u mean and everything.

    oh thanks for the comment on perfect love
    | Posted on 2008-07-24 00:00:00 | by twistedchick | [ Reply to This ]
      wow coffee,

    you should use that as a journal, you have a few spelling mistakes....

    "Why do they distrust the followers of dark.The ones who chose to be [different] like me.They fear our [attitudes] toward life and [judge] our feelings.They compare us to who were not and [wants] us to be the same.[Different] displease them [attitudes] angry them our way confuse them they won't ever understand.

    some Grammar could be used differently but on the whole i kinda see what you mean.

    this is decently written hon.

    | Posted on 2008-07-06 00:00:00 | by nikita2u | [ Reply to This ]
      I understand exactly what you are saying in this write
    So many times peoplethink there is something wrong with a teenager just because they are a little different
    I personally think its extremely important for a teenage to express themselves
    We must remember a person only has one youth and once they lose it and venture into adulthood its lost forever and sadly if its lost to quick a person will spend their wholelife trying to recapture it
    When I was your age I was very goth and listenend to an incredible amount of goth music and wore goth clothes
    Remember though Goth music was extremely different in my time then the Goth culture today
    but still the circumstances where the same as back then I was just a teen trying to express my inner self
    I thought you expressed yourself good in this
    Grea Job!!!
    God Bless
    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    And Also
    God Bless
    | Posted on 2008-01-18 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

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