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    dots Submission Name: Just Thoughtsdots
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    Author: SKillz_Heckle
    ASL Info:    21/Male/Tha BRIARWOOD!!
    Elite Ratio:    6.02 - 268/173/39
    Words: 218
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Love
    Total Views: 340
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       I fell in love today.....I fell in love with someone who I am forbidden.......I don't care what is love to someone like me..it is nothing and within my nothingness lies thoughts that reveal how much nothingness is truly nothing......


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    dotsJust Thoughtsdots
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    Take a long dark stare into my heart
    crystallized, cold and fallen apart
    there was one I loved but she left me dead
    now just another body underneath my shed
    I have homies, friends and brothers of sort
    JD smokes Menthols, only Newport
    we drink Wild Turkey, and the Thunderbird
    speaking within our minds using words unheard
    not religious, but we do believe in God
    Heckle Family together Bitch Slappin Lotus Pod
    we let them run, together with the sinkin sun
    they'll tire out and thats when our battle is won
    reflections in the mirror, I hear and I fear
    that the bells final toll is growing very near
    but then I think back to my precious butterfly
    that flew away, for reason I don't know why
    It don't matter, my dreams will break and shatter
    falling on the floor like glass on the splatter
    __________?¿
    It was all so sudden.........
    but it happened and I can't take it back
    the memories have never left me.....
    the feelling of that night stays in my head...
    Why did I do it?
    Why did she make me do it?
    I don't know.....
    I probably never will
    but all that matters to me right now
    is that inside my heart lies a cacoon
    ready to introduce my new
    Butterfly..............¿




    Submitted on 2004-06-27 05:19:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      AHH MAN That ish was tough i loved it flowed beautifully just a beautiful stream of thoughts and feelings i loved every line damn that was good excellent read. Check out some of my work some time aight I'm No Talent
    | Posted on 2004-06-27 00:00:00 | by No Talent | [ Reply to This ]
      Aww...so sweet! It shows optimism too which is good. I'm glad that your heart is home to a cacoon from which will come a butterfly. Butterflies are pretty and oh so happy. The random thoughts were interesting, at some points confusing yet not confusing if you get what I mean.
    | Posted on 2004-06-27 00:00:00 | by sadistchild | [ Reply to This ]


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