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A lovers Glare


Author: No Talent
ASL Info:    24/m/Ny
Elite Ratio:    4.12 - 263 /178 /31
Words: 230
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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hmm juss tell me if u liked it or not ,what you thought it was about, and how it made you feel


A lovers Glare



I know you but … you’ll probably never know me
I admire you from a far… hoping one day you’ll see…
That I need you... you mean the world to me…
Everyday I see you, you pass me in the hall my knees get weak as My heart…
Slowly begins to fall..
Into a void of hate saying she wouldn’t want you
Then she passes not even returning a lovers glare not even acknowledging
I’m there I blame it all on this poor lovers fear.
That I should spend eternity trapped in despair lonely never truly knowing …
Or feeling…
A lover Glare….
But still…I often ponder the thought…
What happens when a lover returns, your lovers glare…
Showing you care maybe, acknowledging your presence near
Even if I could smell your soothing fragrance throughout the air
Does that really mean I acknowledged you were here
Does that mean you know who I am
Or what I feel for you
Or does it truly mean I wish I knew you
And could feel your most intimate sorrows and desires that make you up
Into my universe and obsession
My shadow and my misfortune
That I shall forever be enslaved by your strange and enchanting spell that
Could possibly condemn my soul to hell, all for the look of a …
Lovers Glare…




Submitted on 2004-06-27 06:45:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this took me by suprise. u seem to give detailed info in the poems that i have checked out and that is really kool because it lets everyone know how the reader is supposed to feel and it puts them in the authors position. i definately been in this place back in school. willing to give it all up for some attention from the right girl. this made the desperate longings i have had in my life re-emerge. this poem is extremely effective.
~bigpapapaine
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| Posted on 2005-08-02 00:00:00 | by BigPapaPaine | [ Reply to This ]
  hi! I think this is wonderful work,I just simply love the first lines-which shows how you felt. It has the ability to bring back flashes of memories-and I think thats amazing.
Great work!
>Sharu<
| Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by sharu | [ Reply to This ]
  It took me a few reads through before finally understanding the shell (if you will) of this piece. I love the part 'i'll blame on this poor lovers fear' that was great, because your not confident enough she doesn't notice you, sounds like reality to me, nice write overall, thanks for posting!
| Posted on 2004-06-27 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
  i liked this piece because it speaks of all of the ins and outs of an estranged relationship...

then comes the stares across a room..
actually this piece brings to mind a piece that I wrote entitled Figment, you should check it out.. it's really along the same line, different twist.

good write
Ora
| Posted on 2004-06-27 00:00:00 | by Oracle | [ Reply to This ]
  actually it was quite good, a bit confusing but really good, i liked the part about the lovers glare. this was a thinking piece as it looks. lots of questions and thats what i like.

enchanting spell that
Could possibly condemn

couldn't u put that in the next line will make more sense then (for me). the ending is real good, that was the best part of the poem!!

Zu
| Posted on 2004-06-27 00:00:00 | by Zu | [ Reply to This ]


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