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    dots Submission Name: Hunger - The Toys of Men, Ch. 3dots
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    Author: rws
    ASL Info:    58/m/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 2779/1297/258
    Words: 301
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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    dotsHunger - The Toys of Men, Ch. 3dots
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    Hunger


    Oh my…

    Are you okay? Should I stop?

    No, please don’t. Christ help me, again right there...

    Okay.

    I…

    Yes?

    I don’t want to be gay. I just want to enjoy what you’re doing. You know…

    Satisfying sex isn’t necessarily orientation, it’s just sex. And it’s meant to be shared like this. So if I make your heart bounce off the walls and you return the favor, come is all we share. Okay?

    Yeah, I like it...but I don’t understand wh…uh…shouldn’t I feel guilty about...

    I’ll be gentle, I promise. I’ll treat you better than my sister’s tits. Or at least as well.

    I’m about to lose it. You’ve done it with your sister?

    Both. It was lovely. I’m the father of half my family, why shouldn’t my closest friend be a lover as well?

    How do you make eternity seem as close as an orgasm? My heart…

    …has drifted away, straight to the tip of my tongue. I guarantee you, you’ll never have better sex than this. Every lover I’ve ever had lives to surrender their soul to me…

    You’re a sexual hypnotist…

    Well, everything you really desire is magic. My Dad taught me that before he died. Devils and angels were part of his legacy.

    I didn’t know, I’m sorry…how did he die?

    My Mom cut off his cock and put it in a pickle jar. She thought love was universal but difficult to share. Like the privileges of an exclusive club. Dad almost agreed…and she split the difference…so to speak.

    Almost poetic, don’t you think?




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      almost poetic... again...
    there was mention of poeticness in the second one i think...?

    interesting...

    im not sure what my reaction/response is.
    father of half his family... seems slightly cryptic and yet i think im sposed to take from that that his neices and nephews are technically his kids perhaps?

    its getting rather twisted and the 'fathers' voice is so "professional" i wondered whether he had been in situations such as this before...

    i'll read the next one and hopefully make a little more sense...
    | Posted on 2008-03-08 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Jesus Christ. This is gorgeous.
    | Posted on 2008-01-21 00:00:00 | by JenFlynn | [ Reply to This ]


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