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    dots Submission Name: Safe In Hell - Toys of Men, Ch. 5 dots
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    Author: rws
    ASL Info:    57/m/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 2777/1297/258
    Words: 467
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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       ~what really happened to 'Lord Father Dad's' troops? what motivates us to wipe the slate clean? hmmm...~


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    dotsSafe In Hell - Toys of Men, Ch. 5 dots
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    Safe In Hell


    Hello, Vi.

    Donnie? Hi! Are you okay? Sorry, I mean, how are you?

    Okay? Well, not yet. Fine I suppose.

    Yeah, later on though…when the world is at a distance and we can talk…

    What about…?

    Him? He’s no one…he wants to get to know me but…that’s best left a mystery.

    Well…

    I’ve missed you. A lot. And I’ve loved…everything about our time together. I was afraid you’d stay away forever.

    I love…you.


    I feel the same way. I’m…sorry I left so abruptly, but…if I hadn’t kept a polite distance until my head cleared…

    Maybe we were too involved the first time. We should have waited…a little…longer…

    You know, for all of that…I’m certain we’ll both be in the same position again. I’m addicted to you…and I don’t know any other way to say it.

    If we marry and raise our daughter…

    H-mm?

    We already share the same name. We could move somewhere…Isn’t there someplace in New Mexico we could go? Where no one knows you as part of a family but just as yourself?

    I don’t think they’d let us leave. It’s been odd since Dad died, but…what’s normal anyway?

    Us. We are. We’re not like…maybe if they couldn’t see us come and go…maybe…

    The only thing I’m sure of is I don’t want to leave my – wife – to the ‘mercies’ of family again.

    And the reason you’ve been gone since before Audrey was born? Will that return? Will you love me, really love me? Or are you trapped between guilt and duty?

    No. I didn’t come back to say goodbye again. It may…trouble me now and then, but, ultimately…you’re the mother of my child…

    And?

    We need each other. I need you…

    And?

    The world isn’t complete without you…no matter how much of a cliché that may be...I won’t survive without you.

    That’s very poetic…enough to make my entire body ache, if you want to trade clichés. But that isn’t what I want to hear. So?

    I love you. If that isn’t enough to link us together in some perpetual shunning by everyone we know, then I have no idea what else would.

    That’s enough. From now on and forever, we are not nor have we ever been siblings. We are now husband and wife. Where there is no sin…

    There is no offense?

    Amen.

    Time to cut our ties to the clan.


    God help us.

    Shhh.




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      ooo... interesting ending.
    cant say i saw it coming [but then you are quite brilliant at creating series like this]

    and i dont think its one to be solved.
    i have my guesses and guesses are more than enough.

    sometimes there are advantages to sharing a name LOL!
    im confused as to who we have left though... donnie [the male] could be who i thought to be the father throughout the series... the one who said he would be as good to someone as he was to his sisters tits... am i right? [lol what a weird question to ask]

    all kindsa problems happen when siblings have children together... all kindsa abnormalities... im thinking the behaviours recounted in this series as a whole would be one of the effects on this family of such incestuous behaviour

    but if running off and pretending theyre married eases their conscience and makes life more bearable then im sure they will be able to forget after a while what their actual relationship status is...

    interesting series here bill...
    | Posted on 2008-03-08 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      This is like reading about Jonestown or Heaven's Gate or Charles Manson... It's disturbing and fascinating all the same. I'm liking it.
    | Posted on 2008-01-24 00:00:00 | by sadtrapofgravit | [ Reply to This ]
      Haa, haha...ahh...Hell is everywhere, isn't it? Hell is what we can possibly be living in, as the afterlife of a "sinner".

    We are just so vulnerable.
    | Posted on 2008-01-21 00:00:00 | by JenFlynn | [ Reply to This ]
      Vi and Donnie? Who are they? I realize there may be other parts bc haven't read but I think it ought to be made clear who is speaking so someone who has not read the other parts may be clued in. Be bolder.
    "From now on we're not siblings, we're husband and wife?"
    Is this about incest? Why else would siblings say that?
    "If we marry and raise our daughter.....?" So the siblings have a child out of wedlock.?
    I realize things like that would "need" to be disguised.
    Do I have the reason right? Am I even close?
    This was still an intriguing work because I wanted to know what was going on.
    IMO you might be more specific about the particulars to clue the reader into what the writer knows.
    | Posted on 2008-01-20 00:00:00 | by azurwarrior | [ Reply to This ]


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