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    dots Submission Name: Daze of Daysdots

    Author: panzyrocker
    ASL Info:    15/m/On
    Elite Ratio:    3.14 - 53/85/67
    Words: 157
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsDaze of Daysdots

    Our eyes they meet,
    our lips they touch,
    waves collide and stars fall,
    crashing into the ocean of our world.

    When i leave im leaving my heart,
    i feel empty and alone,
    the earth errupts around me,
    and i fall asleep dreaming of you.

    Running from the past,
    so you dont know my tales,
    so my mistakes dont catch up,
    and tears don't fall.

    Eyes like an angel,
    cry like a storm,
    im left helpless and dumbfounded,
    to be with you is all i can do.

    Our fates they collide,
    sparks flare and walls crumble,
    the joy of life is being together,
    the feel and smell of being loved.

    The moment is right,
    look into your eyes,
    speechless and stunned,
    in love like a fool.

    The warmth and comfort,
    lying with you is heaven in my mind,
    the only thing i need is you,
    i wish this could last forever.

    Submitted on 2008-01-20 18:03:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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