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    dots Submission Name: Person is to Peopledots

    Author: _proper_noun_
    ASL Info:    20/m/OK
    Elite Ratio:    5.36 - 106/88/24
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Rant/Venting
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    dotsPerson is to Peopledots

    The self-inflicted holds no sway on my conscience.

    So back the fuck off because I already RSVP'd to not be at your pity party.

    Your hobby horse's tragedy mask is falling off, and everybody can see the smile.

    Empty threats, not so empty threats, passing the buck: Three of these things belong together, three of these things are kinda the same.


    Because three of these things kinda sum you up, lately.

    Submitted on 2008-01-21 14:17:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Dude, i dont know what it is, but i like your writing. This is so much different than the other poem of yours I read, different style completly. Free verse, LOVE the form. So untraditional, so forceful. "so back the [censored] off because i already rsvp'd to not be at your pity party" is simply an AMAZING line (and i hereby declare i may or may not use it in future dramatic high school situations, when all the angst becomes just too much). Your message is always so clear, and your lines in this one strike the PERFECT tone. I HAVE to see what else you've written.
    | Posted on 2008-01-21 00:00:00 | by Passionbyapathy | [ Reply to This ]

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