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    dots Submission Name: this quiet daydots
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    Author: hidden lady
    ASL Info:    28/female/nebraska
    Elite Ratio:    4.47 - 116/118/30
    Words: 178
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       same shit different day! it came to a pulsating stop and I couldnt bare to be even for a moment silent any longer


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    this quiet day has almost
    been binding,
    Like the forest and shrubs
    that have grown all around
    the beaten pile of metal
    in the yard.
    Almost reminding me of a
    rabbit hole and where
    it leads.
    The seasons have come again
    and with it the longing
    for strange freedoms and
    masquerades that will never
    match up with lifes paid wages.
    Still through all of the commotion
    of spring and work,
    this quiet day stands out tall
    and unmoving spanning oddly
    through weeks.
    The habbits of established
    bleekness.
    I laid on the street this
    quiet day,
    the concrete cracked,
    broken and worn
    having nothing to offer but
    the dimonds embeded
    in its entirety.
    so I asked the sky which
    lay above me what the point of
    this quiet day was.
    with no reply I felt a pulling
    and a tugging from the very
    souls of my shoes rising
    and forming into a stone
    shattering scream.
    because this quiet day
    has consumed me for to long!




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