Description: Well writing this put me on a natural high, so I hope I can share the emotions with you too. This is me trying to summon Night. If you've ever noticed how different the night feels when you're alone, then when you're with people, I think you'll understand what I mean.
Good Night, The Seductress -------------------------------------------
The Lady beckons at my window
see, She's giving me the eye.
I hope the moon can stay in place
Surely the sun can say goodbye
I need you nigh...
I need you nigh...
With all doubts of resting souls
erased
and the hallway
illuminated by moonlight
a gentle breeze flutters
open the curtains
and Night sleeks in
as a secret lover.
Stars coyly twinkle down
as
Moon sighs a soft breath
near my neck, leaving me
cold,
hot-wiring my heart.
Whoaa, nice work. Yes fox, i agree with you it is kinda erotic at the last line. I like the metaphors that u used for the coyling stars and the moon's breath. It looks like that this hot woman is seducing you and when she takes you to the bed, you become the king of the men.
Great immagination, i am looking forward to reading something like this in the future.
Wow! I loved this. I actually read this bc I had an ES account years ago, and I remembered you were one of the "good ones."
And you surely didn't disappoint!
"Moon hot wiring my heart." What an image. And there is something powerful and mystical about the moon, So much has been attributed to it throughout history
"I need you nigh." Then duplicated. Great effect.
The accent on "flutters" was a nice effect.
I am a night person and I really enjoyed reading this about my favorite time of day.
You were a good poet in the past and have obviously grown with time.
Congratulations!
Wow, truly spectacular, today has been a good day in terms of reading poems for me :). I love the metaphor that shines through this entire piece to Night as a secret lover. I have ALWAYS felt a deep emotional connection to the Night and early morning. Never quite a passionate one, but more of a "calm". The form you used in this, and the rhyming italics in the beginning made this flow amazingly well. I don't know how you realized it would flow well if you built it like this, but you were 100% correct. I'm glad to see another who shares a connection with the Night in quite solitude within ones self. Your imagery and detailed verses really struck me, I could not only "see" the picture you painted, I could "feel" it.
Submission Name: Good Night, The Seductress
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