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    dots Submission Name: Somewheredots
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    Author: jaramae
    ASL Info:    18/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 49/25/29
    Words: 241
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 149
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1502



    Description:
       the story between a boy and a girl and their relationship together.


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    dotsSomewheredots
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    Somewhere along the line we met,
    you a little boy, me little a girl;
    Little did we know what fate had set.
    Somewhere along the line we became enemies -
    Bruised egos, broken hearts;
    Believing you were no friend to me.
    Somewhere along the line we came to an understanding -
    You did you, I did me
    And a friendship grew without planning

    Somewhere along the line we fell in love,
    We put aside our differences
    And let our feelings rise above.
    Somewhere along the line I knew it was you,
    That there was no other man
    And that you felt the same way too.
    Somewhere along the line 'us' become all I needed,
    Just you loving me
    To this all my energy instantly heeded.

    Somewhere along the line we lost our blissful state -
    Caught up in our own lives;
    Not realizing, till it was far too late.
    Somewhere along the line we got off track -
    Now you're not with me,
    But I need us back
    Somewhere along the line I hope to find
    What I once held dear;
    Boy that's you and i

    Somewhere along the line I know there's you and me;
    The kids who fell in love;
    Who realized that this was meant to be.
    Somewhere along the line they're still holding on –
    To the love they once shared;
    Hoping and praying that its not gone.

    Somewhere.




    Submitted on 2008-01-21 18:41:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Well, It does capture a moment in time well.

    You know this is the third poem I've critiqued for you and you are just not a bitter person.
    This poem seemed like it was going to be bitter, and you flipped it on me... sigh... I guess thats a good thing?

    oh well...add feeling not just words.

    ~Carrie
    | Posted on 2008-02-04 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]



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