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    dots Submission Name: That One Thing, Yeah.dots
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    Author: SanctityExposed
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.98 - 48/66/40
    Words: 233
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 666
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1588



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       Something for the biggest piece of me; for the whole of my soul; for the second beat of my heart. For you, my eternity.


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    dotsThat One Thing, Yeah.dots
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    There was a time in my life...
    Yes, really, a time
    Where I thought I'd never love again.
    A time in my life, I say.

    And now, I'm here, able to be
    Wrapped up in your arms.
    And I say, oh I say...
    That one thing, yeah.

    I'll never want to be
    Anywhere else.
    Oh, to you, I give everything.
    My everything.

    Saturday morning pancakes,
    Never plain, but blueberry.
    I want to be here, no where else.
    That one thing, yeah.

    You ask why, and I never can answer.
    I don't know how to sum up
    My feelings for you in words.
    It's harder than that.

    I can rely on one thing,
    And one thing only.
    And I say, woah I say
    That one thing, yeah.

    C'mon baby, let's fight.
    I want to fight so I can
    Just be the center of your
    World.

    I argue, 'cause I don't want you
    To agree with me.
    I cry, 'cause it hurts, and yet
    That one thing, yeah.

    Funny ways of showing
    Affection. I'll never be bored
    Of all your little antics.
    Those are what make me.

    I'm clingy, honey, 'cause
    I don't want you to leave me
    Ever.
    Woah, that one thing, yeah.

    So don't think I'm ever
    Gonna leave you, no.
    'Cause darling...
    It's that one thing, yeah.

    Love.




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    ||| Comments |||
      I like the way it aptly avoids saying the phrase "I love you".

    Very fresh to see a new way to write about love.

    I likey.
    | Posted on 2008-02-09 00:00:00 | by DemonicInk | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the way that instead of saying "I love you you" say "That one thing, yeah", makes me not feel quite so bad about my own issues with that phrase.
    This was pretty nifty, and seemed to have a lyrical base. Perhaps you should give music a try? I can definately see a guy with an old acoustic guitar sitting on a barstool and playing while a shot of whiskey waits at the bar, and his boots tap out the beat against the barroom floor.

    Nice

    Xoxo
    | Posted on 2008-01-24 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      That abotu sums it up don't it? Though ideally in my situation arguing would be minimum (the only thing we have disagreed about so far is my reasons for having no self confidence) course... we aren't *going out* meh, whatever, back to the topic.

    Uh... darnit I dunno, you know I love you works, and I am too into the whole free form thing that I refuse to critique structure. Write something super crappy for me to tear apart sometime, okay?
    | Posted on 2008-01-23 00:00:00 | by Flynn | [ Reply to This ]


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