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    dots Submission Name: Roses Diedots
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    Author: xieno
    Elite Ratio:    2.41 - 7/16/24
    Words: 193
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 669
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1301



    Description:
       5/28/07
    still the best thing ive ever written.


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    dotsRoses Diedots
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    A dozen roses can say "I'm Sorry"
    But they can't clear a guilty conscience
    A written song can say "I love you"
    But love doesn't always last forever
    Just when you thought you had it all
    It all falls apart and you fall with it
    And the world to you just isn't turning
    Anymore...

    When the roses die, and the words fade out
    And you find yourself growing colder by the day
    When the memories hit you like thunder
    You cant help but wonder
    Why did it have to end this way?
    Yeah, nothing lasts forever

    A soft lullaby can say "Sweet dreams"
    But it doesn't mean you'll hold her through the night
    And no matter how beautiful the snow covered hills
    The snow will eventually melt and turn into Spring
    And all you'll have is the memories of a Winter Wonderland...

    When the roses die, and the words fade out
    And you find yourself growing colder by the day
    When the memories hit you like thunder
    You cant help but wonder
    Why did it have to end this way?
    Yeah, nothing lasts forever

    Nothing...nothing...no...
    Nothing lasts forever...




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    ||| Comments |||
      Perhaps the proper label for this piece shouldn't be miscellaneous but depressed. It is a bit more on the dark side but not enough to make it completely dark and there's that melancholic feeling to it so yes...I think this should be labeled as depressed.

    Further more, I think you used symbolism very well. The roses mark the inconsistency of time and as they wither so does everything else. I like the length of the poem, I don't think you could have put so much emotion into it if you went with a short work. I don't know if it's "the best thing you've ever written" but I'll believe you on your word :)

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    | Posted on 2008-01-22 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]


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