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Submission Name: I Am Who I Am dots

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Author:	the heartless
ASL Info:	15/male/LA
Elite Ratio:	3.46 - 24/68/43
Words:	110

Class/Type:	Poetry/Serious
Total Views:	101
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	648

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To tell you the truth, I really think there are alot of poems out there like this I think.....

I Am Who I Am dots

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I'm not afraid of what you say
I won't ever back away
I'm a man who worships God
I don't care if it seems odd

Look, fuck you if you hate it
True I get bitched and feel faded
But I am who I am and thats me
So guess what bitch let it be

Nothing you do will make me afraid
Nothing you say can perswade

The thought I've created and the belief I believe
This belief of God, this fact of truth that I have found

So I'll shout from the mountains and scream it loud
Guess what I'm me and I am proud

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  Hmmm. I understand what you are saying... just a few grammatical errors is all that I saw wrong with this piece.

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| Posted on 2008-01-24 00:00:00 | by Draumrkopa | [ Reply to This ]
  Well, this piece first off had a few very critical spelling and grammar problems that need resolved. Above and beyond there it appeared you were attempting a very structured rhyme, but it broke down and I noticed the rhymes seeming forced. You are very "forceful" about your beliefs, which in normal respects is fine and good, but when your belief system is based more on tolerance and persuasion than offensive approach, its a little weird. Christianity is a relatively accepted form of religion, the persecution you would "face" from that far under weighs that of other religions including the absence of one (atheists). Other religions since the beginning of time have had to deal with the few over zealous Christians who speak down to all other beliefs. This seems like it should be a poem about people who are outcast because they are not Christians, not a poem about Christians who are outcasts. After all, no matter who turns their back on you, you ALWAYS have the support and love of your father god. In all I find this offensive not only to non-Christians but also to Christians as it doesn't represent their belief structure at all. You do have the right to personal opinion and free belief, so I won't yell at you for this, I just strongly disagree with the message.
| Posted on 2008-01-22 00:00:00 | by Passionbyapathy | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked it because I know how you feel. I agree with the other comments about `f` words and so on. Its not my style anyway. You have talent and can use it wisely. If I may be so bold, try my piece on `I Peace` this first rather lenghty one I submitted and you will get my drift. Keep well and keep writing am looking forwrd to it. Joachim.
| Posted on 2008-01-22 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]
  I would have to agree with azurwarrior. I personally ain't Christian, but have absolutely no problems with them. Many of my friends and family are hardcore Christians.

However this piece, with a discourse along the lines of "f.uck you if you hate it" made me cringe.

Strongly believing in something is not a reason to be a close-minded insult windmill. Fear not, I do not think that this is what you are. However, read this piece from an objective point of view and look what stands out...

Cut off the aggressiveness and you might just get yourself a nice little piece here......
| Posted on 2008-01-22 00:00:00 | by Circular | [ Reply to This ]
  I like your confidence. Though I did wonder why a man of God would be using base language such as "[censored] you if you hate it." and "Guess what, [censored], Let it be."
No offense, but that strikes me as being a bit fearful of what certain others might think. IMO.I could be wrong, of course...
| Posted on 2008-01-22 00:00:00 | by azurwarrior | [ Reply to This ]

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