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A Promise


Author: Polydectes
ASL Info:    29/m/South Africa
Elite Ratio:    7.84 - 154 /85 /38
Words: 94
Class/Type: Poetry /Passion
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Two Balassi Stanzas.


A Promise



Into the night so young,
a poor bird sang a song,
-about wanders and delight,
Of Madeline's so fine
and rosemary's and thyme.
-Charming smells it will invite
the splendour of my love
and everything thereof.
-All Life's spice I shall provide

Toward the night so dark,
journeys we will embark,
-and the memoirs we shall grew,
together stride this trail,
delayed I shall prevail.
-for that light we shall pursue.
As long as there is hope,
the reason is to cope,
-and the motive must be you.




Submitted on 2008-01-22 03:57:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I love the structure of it but moreso the layers, this is like a rose that unfolds and slowly releases its fragrance.

Baie geniet dankie dat jy dit met ons deel.
| Posted on 2011-06-22 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]
  As long as there is hope,
the reason is to cope,
-and the motive must be you.

As long as there is hope, i will stand by you
as long as there is hope, i will carry you
as long as there is hope, i will provide for you
as long as there is hope, i will encourage your
as long as there is hope, i will protect you
as long as there is hope, i will carress you
as long as there is hope, i will exalt you
as long as there is hope, i will cover you
as long as there is hope, i will comfort you

the reason is to extend time
the reason is to do the impossible
the reason is to think the unthinkable
the reason is to give the ungivable
the reason is to get the uncontainable
the reason is to do the impossible
the reason is to give the spice of life

the motive is
you


*Couldn't have imagined a better love than this.


| Posted on 2008-08-12 00:00:00 | by lily21 | [ Reply to This ]
  Your ending was perfect. "-All Life's spice I shall provide -and the motive must be you" captures the essense of love. I'd say this poem's quite romantic and one that would be most appreciated by the person for whom it may be written. Beautiful! Sharon

| Posted on 2008-02-06 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
  Well I think I got this fine poem with so much feeling and promises right. Ek hou daarvan want dis oprreg en kom uit die hart. Dit lees gemaklik en as ek dit nie korrek het nie, nogtans uitstekende werk Joachim.
Well done it is tops.
I like it very much.

In die aandskemer van julle lewe
sing `n arm man `n lied

Met wandelinge en genietinge
saam met Madeline fyn

Met die kruie geure .....van liefde
betowerende geure sal dit bring

Die rykheid van jou liefde
Die lewens kruie nodig
Sal jy bring

die aand het ver gevorder
stap julle die lewe verder

in gedagtes en herinneringe
Samesyn saamgesnoer deur die lewe

op `n vertraagde- uitgestelde lewens reis
Jou en jou geliefde nou oppad na die Lig - beter dae

solank julle hoop in mekaar bly - liefde nie verflou nie
is daar rede om met julle doel te slaag

Want die rede vir jou hoop is sy.
| Posted on 2008-01-22 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]
  Ek probeer nog die een. Effe spicy. Jm.
| Posted on 2008-01-22 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]


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