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    dots Submission Name: A Promise dots
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    Author: Polydectes
    ASL Info:    29/m/South Africa
    Elite Ratio:    7.84 - 154/85/38
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    Description:
       Two Balassi Stanzas.


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    dotsA Promise dots
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    Into the night so young,
    a poor bird sang a song,
    -about wanders and delight,
    Of Madeline's so fine
    and rosemary's and thyme.
    -Charming smells it will invite
    the splendour of my love
    and everything thereof.
    -All Life's spice I shall provide

    Toward the night so dark,
    journeys we will embark,
    -and the memoirs we shall grew,
    together stride this trail,
    delayed I shall prevail.
    -for that light we shall pursue.
    As long as there is hope,
    the reason is to cope,
    -and the motive must be you.




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      I love the structure of it but moreso the layers, this is like a rose that unfolds and slowly releases its fragrance.

    Baie geniet dankie dat jy dit met ons deel.
    | Posted on 2011-06-22 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]
      As long as there is hope,
    the reason is to cope,
    -and the motive must be you.

    As long as there is hope, i will stand by you
    as long as there is hope, i will carry you
    as long as there is hope, i will provide for you
    as long as there is hope, i will encourage your
    as long as there is hope, i will protect you
    as long as there is hope, i will carress you
    as long as there is hope, i will exalt you
    as long as there is hope, i will cover you
    as long as there is hope, i will comfort you

    the reason is to extend time
    the reason is to do the impossible
    the reason is to think the unthinkable
    the reason is to give the ungivable
    the reason is to get the uncontainable
    the reason is to do the impossible
    the reason is to give the spice of life

    the motive is
    you


    *Couldn't have imagined a better love than this.


    | Posted on 2008-08-12 00:00:00 | by lily21 | [ Reply to This ]
      Your ending was perfect. "-All Life's spice I shall provide -and the motive must be you" captures the essense of love. I'd say this poem's quite romantic and one that would be most appreciated by the person for whom it may be written. Beautiful! Sharon

    | Posted on 2008-02-06 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      Well I think I got this fine poem with so much feeling and promises right. Ek hou daarvan want dis oprreg en kom uit die hart. Dit lees gemaklik en as ek dit nie korrek het nie, nogtans uitstekende werk Joachim.
    Well done it is tops.
    I like it very much.

    In die aandskemer van julle lewe
    sing `n arm man `n lied

    Met wandelinge en genietinge
    saam met Madeline fyn

    Met die kruie geure .....van liefde
    betowerende geure sal dit bring

    Die rykheid van jou liefde
    Die lewens kruie nodig
    Sal jy bring

    die aand het ver gevorder
    stap julle die lewe verder

    in gedagtes en herinneringe
    Samesyn saamgesnoer deur die lewe

    op `n vertraagde- uitgestelde lewens reis
    Jou en jou geliefde nou oppad na die Lig - beter dae

    solank julle hoop in mekaar bly - liefde nie verflou nie
    is daar rede om met julle doel te slaag

    Want die rede vir jou hoop is sy.
    | Posted on 2008-01-22 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]
      Ek probeer nog die een. Effe spicy. Jm.
    | Posted on 2008-01-22 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]


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