Description: This is a poem that I wrote while sleep-deprived and thinking about my last bullshit relationship. After putting her picture away I realized that she wasn't worth my time or tears. So this is a bit to say goodbye. Any and all comments welcome. I'm hoping that this will be the first of many to usher in my return to ES.
This is an interesting perspective on the ending of a relationship, and the beginning of a whole new turn in your life. You have a certain optimism to your pessimism. The form is free verse, but its really simple in structure, and absent in rhyme. I want to slay it flows well, but its a little sluggish around the edges, a few more poetic techniques like alliteration and such would speed up the progression. I enjoyed the overall message, mostly because I can relate.
Hi there and welcome to the game of lIfe. Yep we are all palyers in the games we choose. Sometimes bending the rules a bit just to make it more interestimg.
Well when rule first meets rule last the game is has come ful circle en is over. And lessons well learned and experiences worthwhile is the points in the Game gained.
Remember the time as well worth it and keep the best pages in your memory book. Acting is a way of life - even if its real. I liked it and wish you well. Many more sunny pages. Joachim
Submission Name: Beautiful Nightmare
