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    dots Submission Name: That's the Differencedots
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    Author: Jester_Gesture
    ASL Info:    20/f/WA or IL
    Elite Ratio:    3.44 - 354/430/184
    Words: 205
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 111
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    dotsThat's the Differencedots
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    I'm only going to tell you this once.
    Once in this form, and once to your face.
    Once in a letter, once in my dreams,
    and once across the electric lines.

    I wish you wouldn't.

    If your fury with my self-destruction
    is so unhindered and blameless then
    why in hell
    do I have to let you kill yourself?
    I'm just quicker than you.
    You're just taking your time.
    That's all.

    That's the difference.

    I know I can't stop you or
    wrench it from your grasp.
    But if I was on the brink, if I
    had a gun in my hand
    and I
    heard your voice
    I would stop.
    I would let you save me.
    I would let you make me save myself.
    But how would I affect you?
    I don't know.
    You don't tell me.
    That's all.

    That's the difference.

    Do you trust me?
    Enigmatic, silent, distancing,
    all these things that you hide from me.
    I don't think anyone should
    take charge or wear the pants and
    no one should be anybody's hero.
    But when it comes down to it?
    You don't trust me.
    That's all.
    You shield me from it.

    I wish you wouldn't.
    That's all.




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      It is a funny thing, pain. the way each of us deals with the same situation. I could feel the anger in your voice, your disapointment and your hope for something better in this situation. Good write, keep it up.
    | Posted on 2008-06-14 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked it. It was good because you clearly displayed your feelings about what that other person is/was doing, but what I didn't understand was who that person was. Is it a boyfriend/girlfriend thing, a friend, a parent? I liked it in the sense that it was a good poem because it got ot your feelings over this subject. It was written welland even if it didn't rhyme that was ok in this poem. I am normally a rhymer, but this one actually worked where it sounded ok that it didn't. I enjoyed this piece. It was very heartfelt.

    ~Good Job
    | Posted on 2008-02-01 00:00:00 | by BeautifulSoul | [ Reply to This ]


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