Description: Ok, assignment for my creative writing class. It has to be a non-human thing. So I went with eyes. That's non-human, right? o.O I mean, it's not a whole human... it's a part of one. *shrug* oh well
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The heavens have made known to me
The land I live upon
By gazing in a silver pool
The gift is giv'n to me
And by the light I've come to know
Your friends and neighbors as well
I've examined the face of your brother
And cried in accompaniment to you
I went blind at the frightening scene
That you couldn't deal with either
In the depths of my core
I feel that you are my closest friend
And I you
That we should die together
The poem is a bit unclear to me, I know by your description that you are talking about eyes or just about one eye. The best I could made out of this is that you are looking in a mirror(“I've examined the face of your brother”) but the one eye can not see as well as the other(“And cried in accompaniment to you
I went blind at the frightening scene”), maybe because you should be wearing glasses. Then you say that the eyes should die together. That the one must last just as long as the other.
I’m sorry if I didn’t get your poem, maybe it’s over my head. Is there a reason you said “giv'n” instead in given, poets usually write like that to cut out syllables, like ‘bout instead of about. What do you mean by “And I you” is I a homophone for eye maybe, it’s the only way I could make sense out of it.
Maybe “I” will “eye” some of your other writes as well. Regards
Johan
Submission Name: Orbs
