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    dots Submission Name: The End of Medots
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    Author: Aethyx
    ASL Info:    14/f/sc
    Elite Ratio:    4.04 - 25/23/15
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsThe End of Medots
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    My name is Anna
    Im only 15
    And I'm dieing
    From smoking weed
    And drinking beer
    And doing speed
    Now I'm in the hospital dieing
    And my mom she cant stop crying
    I wish I could have turned around
    But I'm too late judging by the sound
    The monitors flat lined again
    Can the doctors save their addicted friend
    It's all my fault yes I know
    Bright idea to drive drunk in the snow
    I couldn't miss the party of the year
    Another opportunity to drink some beer
    I really fucked up when I got in the car
    I figured well home's not that far
    And who would have though I'd hit a tree
    And that would be the end of me




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      Everyone has something that killing them quickly don't they. One thing I love about this poem is how discriptive you were. You weren't afraid to hold anything back. It seems as if I'm at the hospital with you.
    Sorry, but I have one thng to critisize. The thing that threw me of is how you started out the poem in free verse, and them started rhyming. Even though you can still say what you want and still rhyme, I think you should try a whole poem using free verse.
    Besides that, it was really good. and no matter what anyone says, don't listen to someone who tries to force you to stop, it won't work. you have to stop when your ready to stop. And don't let anyone try to say something is wrong with you, you will be fine. This is from a poem by my favorite poet, Anne Sexton called "The Addict". I live this poem.

    "I make arrangments for a pint-siz journey
    I an the queen of this condition.
    I am an expert on making the trip.
    And now they say I'm an addict.
    Now they ask why.
    Why!"

    By the way, I just realized this, you spelled dying wrong.

    ~*~katara~*~
    | Posted on 2008-01-24 00:00:00 | by daughterofdeath | [ Reply to This ]


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