This is pretty cute. Short and sweet. It seems very methodically calculated. The lines were put together perfectly. How the last line on first two and last two stanzas rhyme. And the parts the two lines behind them rhyme as well. I usually do not like rhyming poetry but there is something nice and sweet about this particular poem. Plus it really reminded me of a certain someone so you get props for invoking strong feeling. (^_^) Over all good write. Keep it up.
I rather enjoyed this poem and found it to be quite intruiging. When I read this I get the description of a couple making love and losing themselves within each other
"Lose control,
I feel your soul,
As we become one."
This last verse seems to describe the moment when a couple climaxes together.
Only type error - the second stanza in the first verse need to be capitalized at the beginning.
Overall, I thought the poem altogether was very strong and evoke good imagery and intense emotion. I really liked it. great write
Submission Name: Our Dance
