Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • ES Magazine
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • Video Tutorials
  • RolePlay
  • 90% off Amazon
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: The Scene in Which a Bumblebee Breaks a Stringdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: doppelganger
    ASL Info:    19/f/your brain
    Elite Ratio:    1.66 - 27/198/141
    Words: 176
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 149
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1208



    Description:
       Another assignment for Creative Writing. It's about music. *shrug* whatever.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsThe Scene in Which a Bumblebee Breaks a Stringdots
    -------------------------------------------


    Flowing in and out with time,
    Rising high and low;
    No one can e'er catch my name,
    When above heaven it flies.
    Flitting in and out of dreams,
    And those within our waking
    Moments, symbols plucked
    From the vinery of God, and
    Spill mind altering phrases
    Into each gilded cup
    To be sipped at will and then
    Tossed into the mind.
    A label can not possess
    That which lies in
    My exhalations.
    Poets call those fragments
    Of literacy brethren to my
    Being,
    But remain poetry
    When my tendrils touch not
    Their inky flesh.
    I'll float through the
    Waters of consciousness,
    And permeate your dreams;
    Retelling odes of years
    Long past, which dreamers
    Fail to even dream about,
    And only recall life from
    Literature.
    My feet, which can be
    Wrapped in many types of silk,
    Move on, swing on, and sway on
    To the tilt in the axis
    Of euphoria
    Brought in from one of
    Five of Humanity's offspring.
    A spice on the cake of
    Eternity;
    I only live to serve.




    Submitted on 2008-01-23 13:25:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      I don't know why this isn't a good poem ... you make fine verse, you find wild and interesting figures, the poem is about something important ... but it bored me. I had to remember to go back and get a line that I missed, and I nearly didn't finish reading it.
    Trying to think why, I thought maybe there is a lot to follow in this poem - it's rich, makes links to so many other important topics.

    That's a clue I guess. It is an old-fashioned and unpopular type of poetry because nobody spends a week studying a single poem like they used to in Milton's days! But poets still spend a week or a year writing a poem! It's not fair at all. But I bet it gets a good assessment in your coursework.
    | Posted on 2008-01-23 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]



    Full Anime Episodes Streaming Free
    5 million youtube videos all rated over 4.7 stars with 40+ ratings

    [ Copy this | Start New | Full Size ]

    Google
     

    [ Chrispian ] [ Write Forum ]
    [ Friends ] [ SNESroms ] .
    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry
    This user has been inactive for more than 5 days.