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    dots Submission Name: i could tell you anythingdots
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    Author: amanda99737
    ASL Info:    14/f/AK.
    Elite Ratio:    1.59 - 8/13/45
    Words: 370
    Class/Type: Story/
    Total Views: 92
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    Bytes: 2019



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    dotsi could tell you anythingdots
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    I think would be best if it were a story.


    When it first happened, Aila wasn't sure it was real. but after the third time she was convinced. She wandered around the park, with the cold air piercing her lungs and the stars sparkling in the sky. Her steps were steady and slow as she sauntered to a large tree that had twisted branches, like it were an animal trapped and clawing to break free of it's own bark. Aila sighed and sat down against the base of the oak. She tilted her head upwards and let her eyes close. The adrenaline that was pounding through her almost made her sick. She attempted to get her heart to settle; it was like a small bird fluttering madly in it's cage. Aila could feel it now; the warm fear that took her at this time of night.

    the sun violently stabbed the sky, killing all signs of night. The dew from the grass chilled Aila and she pulled her coat closer to herself. Her hair was messy and the smell of a dead animal was naseating. Aila stood up cautiosly and used the tree for support. Again she let her eyes close, resting her head back. She turned to look to her left and saw a person with jogging clothes...dead. She put her hand to her mouth trying to hold back the urge to vomit. The body looked as if it had been brutally attacked by a dog. she had never killed a human before. Aila ran back to her apartment and locked the door quickly. She stood for a few moment in shock before she went to the bathroom and looked at her reflection in the mirror. Dried blood was on her mouth; with shaking hands she washed it off. Now her skin pale from fright she turned on the news. "Wolf attacks still plague the area." Aila gulped, her eyes never leaving the screen. "As you can see here, the bite marks are deep. This animal meant to kill this person." Aila ran to the bathroom and vomited in the toilet: the reporter still in the background. "City Officials caution people to stay indoors after nightfall."




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