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    dots Submission Name: Caughtdots
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    Author: WhY-dO-yOu-CrY
    ASL Info:    17/F/ConnUSA
    Elite Ratio:    5.51 - 131/79/78
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Poetry/Trapped
    Total Views: 116
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 391



    Description:
       short i know, you might understand, might not.

    Something happened and my friend wanted answer's.


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    Giving the look of wanting answer's,

    Brown met blue.

    She turned away.

    But she knew, he would talk to her soon.


    And she wondered what he would suspect.

    And she wondered what he would say.

    And she wondered if he knew.

    And if he did, what the hell was she going to do?




    Submitted on 2008-01-23 16:40:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Putting a lot of dialogue and feelings into a tiny little poem, I love to read verse like this!

    "answers" should be "answers" - an apostrophe is for possessive, not for plural.

    I'm still trying to imagine what she knew ... ruining me day ... I'd call this a successful artwork!
    | Posted on 2008-01-23 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      could be about any number of things that might go wrong in a relationship. friendship or more.
    anyway that's why i like it, because for you it is about a particular event but the reader is left to come to his/her own conclusion. well done.
    simple and sweet and to the point.
    good then. like it.
    "brown met blue". perfect.
    oh yea, i think cheating?
    | Posted on 2008-01-23 00:00:00 | by eno1 | [ Reply to This ]


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