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    dots Submission Name: in the trees we are foreverdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsin the trees we are foreverdots
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    last nights killer
    was the bloodied of soul.
    & no one kills the prophet
    like the ones we love.

    heart breaths
    are as stormy weather
    in the nude red.
    & my longing
    is not returned
    in the evening.

    where are your patterns,
    when you say that you love?
    & when your pacifist tongue
    negates my devotion.

    where is your flavored tip
    of finger that you once set upon
    my wrinkled brow?

    at night,
    when the time stretches,
    my body next to yours
    will be the lonely toll.

    what i hope will last
    is the willingness to remember
    & the dedication
    to not forget
    that in the trees
    we are forever.
    & that we are forever in the trees




    Submitted on 2008-01-23 18:31:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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