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    dots Submission Name: This boy is my saviordots
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    Author: girly101
    Elite Ratio:    3.93 - 262/222/124
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsThis boy is my saviordots
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    How can you say you love me,
    With your gentle smile,
    perfect words,
    and white empty eyes?
    What right have you,
    to hush my cries,
    with a soft kiss?
    You, an angel of light,
    in the seemingly dark world.
    To hold me tight,
    and not let go
    To kiss my cheek,
    when I wan't to die.
    To tell the truth,
    and never lie.
    Why do you save me,
    from myself,
    and tell me,
    it'll be okay?
    Why do you,
    think about me,
    and worry about me,
    as I do you?
    Why has perfection,
    met myself,
    me- this shattered reflection.




    Submitted on 2008-01-23 19:21:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was also very good. I loved how you rhymed, it flowed great. im also a big person for rhymes. but anyway it was really good, passionate and it has a clear 'story' line
    | Posted on 2008-03-04 00:00:00 | by Aangskate | [ Reply to This ]


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