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    dots Submission Name: Abstractdots
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    Author: Jester_Gesture
    ASL Info:    20/f/WA or IL
    Elite Ratio:    3.43 - 354/433/185
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 128
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 635



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       Wrote this on my lunch hour.

    Я люблю вас, несмотря на все.


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    dotsAbstractdots
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    Implicit differences,
    impossible distances.
    One side of the juxtaposition:
    give
    yourself
    up.

    All these idiosyncrasies;
    I adore the least of these.
    The heart contends that
    it
    will be
    enough.

    There's you and me and the night.
    Truth, taciturnity, and the fight.
    The answer is not elsewhere, it is
    down
    to
    us.

    It's so much closer from where I stand,
    heart held out in an open hand.
    It's difficult, intangible, but in
    you I
    put my
    trust.




    Submitted on 2008-01-23 19:45:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Your poem "untitled" made me curious (a poem showing how a poem is in the works?), and I decided look at something else you wrote. This was the first I looked at and I think it is a really wonderful piece. The flow, word choice, and imagery are just great. I love the first stanza, but all are nothing short of great writing. Is the whole piece about a difference or argument between you and a loved one, and your desire for reconciliation? Well again, great stuff, one of the few that have really impressed me.
    ~bkj
    | Posted on 2008-01-24 00:00:00 | by bkj43 | [ Reply to This ]


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