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    dots Submission Name: Limelightdots
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    Author: Keaton Volkov
    ASL Info:    18/M/Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    4.73 - 22/17/13
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 728
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 574



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    dotsLimelightdots
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    The flowing petals stick to my shoulders,
    And I sigh, looking up at the ease of night,
    Trying to remember your face.
    It slowly appears to me,
    First a blur,
    Now a shimmer,
    And now clear as crystal,
    Your beauty shining through the blanket of darkness.
    My eyes start open, and I realize I am not alone.
    It is your lips that grace my cheek,
    And it is that cheek that quivers, sending slight chills down my spine.
    I turn, and yet you are gone,
    Faceless, lost in an eternity of forgotten sorrow.




    Submitted on 2008-01-23 22:43:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was good use of imagery. I am not convinced the title of the piece fits the poem. Otherwise, it read very well, was concise and understandable.
    | Posted on 2008-01-24 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]


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