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Act of Faith 01-01-08

Author: Falling Rain
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I'm not Christian or Catholic or anything, but i'm working on a manuscript that has a religious tone. This is one of the poems for it.

Act of Faith 01-01-08

Going ahead with nothing but my faith
In my soul the Holy Wraith
A burning passion in my heart,
I knew it was time for me to depart.
Going forward to share my Good News,
Him being my single muse,
I had to let others know,
How to benefit, to reap and sow,
All the goodness we could create,
To banish immorality and hate,
To bring His people to a new light,
Making everything that was wrong right.

Submitted on 2008-01-24 01:22:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  'Going ahead with nothing but my faith" sets up a hero motif, iacts alone.
"In my soul the Holy Wraith"Isn't God supposed to be compassionate?
"Making everything that was wrong, right."
Who decides what is wrong or right?
| Posted on 2008-01-24 00:00:00 | by azurwarrior | [ Reply to This ]

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