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    dots Submission Name: Take the Timedots
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    Author: forfila
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    dotsTake the Timedots
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    Take the Time


    The ideals and the lights on show,


    Attractions for the eyes, the hypnosis of the glow,


    Roaming to and fro while the voices call to follow,


    swallowing you whole, rendering you hollow.





    Hold on to your mind,


    Take the time, would you want it all if the cost was to fall,


    The loss of what was taken for granted, can cause the spirit to crawl,



    Fight for what you believe in and character build.





    Never push away time, today is yesterdays tomorrow, we are moving in one
    big line,


    Keep your incentive attending your loved ones,


    Live your life, your one of a kind.

    2008 Raven




    Submitted on 2008-01-24 07:57:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the title and the message in this simple, but profound poem. So much hurt and so many mistakes could be avoided if we only took a little more time before words or action!
    | Posted on 2008-01-27 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Another encouraging piece - live - be yourself and don't let the "world" get to you.

    Thanks for sharing and for reminding us!

    love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles to share
    tif
    | Posted on 2008-01-24 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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