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    dots Submission Name: Sunset Snow Salsadots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Prose/Nature
    Total Views: 410
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 680



    Description:
       Ah, winter in the foothills of the Sierra Mountains - low snow & a happy glow ~*~

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    dotsSunset Snow Salsadots
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    Though the full rays of the sun
    seemed hidden by the dark winter clouds;

    Sunset brought an illumination of oranges
    & reds melding with the clouds in a
    dance of winter night

    Like the flames jumping from my fire
    and the classic vinyl playing in the background...

    The trees took note of the dancing flames
    and stepped in with the breeze:

    Swaying to a fro and with limbs as arms
    in concert - conjuring the snow
    bringing "IT" to not fall
    but to dance

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    Sunset Snow Salsa




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      Quite a delightful write-up, this is ...Tiffany, I enjoyed reading this

    ..........there is great imagination and uniqueness here, that is seen quite plainly all through this poem and this makes it all the more interesting for the readers......

    .....This poem was skilfully worded right from the title "Sunset Snow Salsa" to the last word.......

    Nicely portrayed description of nature and the surroundings during snowfall.... ..........

    .........It takes the reader for an enchanting trip to the snow mountains, just by viewing the lovely picture of snow, trees, twilight etc. that you have painted in this poem.

    good work. : )
    | Posted on 2008-03-18 00:00:00 | by mdsouza | [ Reply to This ]
      wish I could be there to see this!
    I love the mountains and can see the fire-
    being indoors and looking out at the snow
    is my idea of luxury.

    It's been so cold here, but I'm glad you can celebrate
    winter as beautifully as you've done here.

    Love,

    Nan
    | Posted on 2008-02-13 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      I love your wonderful vision that transcends the immediate and the visible and dares to look beyond. Yes, the presence of thick, dark clouds does not imply any loss in sun's splendour... in fact, their co-existence brings forth God's art in all its majestic glory.

    Description is so realistic, it is a lovely word-painting.

    Thanks for sharing this beautiful Epiphany.
    | Posted on 2008-02-12 00:00:00 | by Parul garg | [ Reply to This ]
      Sunset Snow Salsa- what a lovely and original thought. I quite like it. Dancing colors, snowflakes, flames, and trees. Neat way you have the flakes falling down too. This poem brings lots of sunshine on a cold winter's day.
    | Posted on 2008-02-10 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      I live in Texas and have only seen snow once and this kind of captured what I felt the one time I saw it fall when I was 9. This is very good.
    | Posted on 2008-01-26 00:00:00 | by Pursuitoflife | [ Reply to This ]
      This is lovely Tiffany! It reflects the mood and delight of watching falling snow!
    | Posted on 2008-01-26 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      at first the title of this piece confused me, and I almost passed this by, but then I decided that I would give it a chance, and at least read the first few lines. I liked the way this described sunset in detail, and made me realize why it was given the title it has. Makes a hundred times more sense having red it. The description was superb, the imagery vibrant. Over all I think you did a splendid job of writing this.

    xoxo
    | Posted on 2008-01-25 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      Dancing trees and snow....what a lovely and endearing thought that is.

    Imagery in this piece is very vivid, and quite superb.

    Bravo dear poetess.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2008-01-25 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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