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    dots Submission Name: Once A Star, Now a Shadowdots
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    Author: Maiku Deamon
    ASL Info:    16/M/Mi
    Elite Ratio:    4.46 - 4/3/6
    Words: 838
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
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       The emotional strength a poem can give you is everyone's most favorite thing about poetry. So tell me, what does this do for you? Does it compel you or repel you?


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    dotsOnce A Star, Now a Shadowdots
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    A star once was shining in the crystal night,
    For there was a child left in it's frozen light.
    The day that the star exploded,
    Was the day that it died.
    This was the beginning of an emotional boy,
    who lay in his bed and cried.

    He wallowed all night and he sighed all day,
    He wasn't wanted and he couldn't stay.
    No one ever thought how sad and lonely he might be,
    Not even after he cut his arms and slit his wrists with glee.
    His friends knew what was happening,
    But they stood far from his side.
    They didn't tell his parents,
    Or he might cut and die.

    Walking through the halls of school,
    Acting as if he didn't know,
    That everyone was pointing at him,
    And mocking his deadly glow.
    They all had pure bright gases,
    Shining off their lively core,
    But just because I'm dead inside,
    Does not welcome you to explore.

    They wouldn't leave me by myself,
    I had many problems of my own,
    But they didn't care at all,
    And they knew I was alone.
    They saw it as a weakness,
    They slipped past my defense,
    They shattered my reality,
    And broke my every fence.

    Those evil people saw a way,
    To get inside my head,
    They steered right into me,
    And ruined my only bed.
    They broke it into many parts,
    And spit upon it twice,
    And turned my heart black,
    With their sour evil might.

    I pushed them out with force,
    And gone they always would be,
    I was trapped inside darkness,
    And darkness is what I see.

    Afraid for him was one last soul,
    The one who was never heard.
    This charming girl of wonder,
    Would forever be a blur.
    She could not be seen by normal eyes,
    She could not speak by tongues.
    The only way they ever meet,
    Was being caught, strung up, and hung.

    The town did not want them there and so died in vain,
    Not even their own parents loved them, for who could even blame?
    They hurt them self to rid their pains and ease their suffering,
    They hung them self in blasphemy and would never feel again.
    The two young kids just only 16 had once a pretty life.
    But it all fell to ashes when they picked up their first knife.

    He was a drummer, she was a singer and both were in a band so true.
    They planned that they would never leave and would forever pull through.
    Drama masqueraded itself as a one truth they would ever know.
    It lied to them and made it so that they would never grow.
    It spoke of tales of past lives that guilt them self selves to hell,
    But it forgot to say that they would come to know it well.

    School was not happy and they never looked forwards to tomorrow,
    For dieing would save them from a life of misery, pain, and sorrow.
    Their only last wish traveled through them as their body bled with hatred,
    It spoke of why they hung them self with a rope around their neck.

    "We hate the world for they couldn't see, they would not leave us alone.
    We changed our personalities and even our life at home.
    We dressed this way to let everyone see that we needed someone to talk.
    We wanted it so badly that we carved into our skin like chalk.
    We felt like we were riding on a bus that left long ago,
    We were two lovers sitting in the back freezing in the snow.
    If you had ever stepped inside and took a look at us,
    You'd realize that we were here just covered in this stuff.
    We said we hated you mom and dad I know we said a lot of things.
    But you should have known that we loved you for we were your blessings."

    "You created us and ever since we've secretly hid that we were glad.
    But now it's done and over with and it's all your fault we were sad.
    No one cared to look at us and no one cared to ask,
    The only things they said to us was go cut yourself with glass!
    We will not avenge ourselves as we don't even care.
    Because we're both rotting, but at least we're together.
    Our only wish has traveled from us and sent back to you,
    So now you know what happened and now you see the truth."

    Once a star, Now a shadow,
    No more memories, no more tragedies.
    Help the next, do not laugh,
    Do not stare, do not Ask.

    Ask about them and they scream.
    Try to help they will yelp.
    Grant them love they will change.
    To them self without any hate.

    Do not fear what you are,
    Do not wonder just how far.
    Do not take the pain,
    Do not let it in.
    And you won't have to ever,
    Ever feel it again.




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      A pair is twice strong or twice weak? It depends upon the common goal and what can be rationalized as being "good". I should think a second would be something to hold on to, that we sometimes can find ourselves better while reflecting upon and sharing the humanity of another.

    Unfortunately reinforcement can go either way, towards the positive or even the negative. A natural affection should yield protection because a "pack mentality", even a micro pack of two is in effect a family. Perhaps finding your own "soul" kind can be better than what else might be discribed as such.

    Human beings need relationships, communication, touch. Packs with closed doors end up biting each other as much as any strangers anyway, so keep your own door ajar, and be a star.
    | Posted on 2008-01-25 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      " Do not fear what you are,
    Do not wonder just how far.
    do not take the pain,
    Do not let it in.
    And you won't ever,
    Ever feel it again."

    These lines seem to me, the crystallization of this poem, so full of pain otherwise.
    Some say hell is the other person. I know that's negative but the couple in the poem seem to go through so much and no one seems willing or able to help.And sometimes even actively harm.
    One thought I had and this will probably seem odd, is why the musicians didn't use that to escape their fate and move on?
    A thoughtful, interesting write..
    | Posted on 2008-01-25 00:00:00 | by azurwarrior | [ Reply to This ]



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