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    dots Submission Name: Sharing The Native Peace Pipedots
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    Author: azurwarrior
    ASL Info:    44/m/SoCal
    Elite Ratio:    5.03 - 86/85/63
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       This is a Native scene in winter.
    (You might want to smoke a peace pipe before you read it.) (JK)


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    dotsSharing The Native Peace Pipedots
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    Ah.................
    Trudging the trail of Winter quiet,
    Leaving a bit of scene behind,
    with every aching forward step.
    Enjoying the kaleidoscopic frost,
    feeling mesmerized....
    Are there secrets hidden here?
    azure, crystal enveloping skies,
    wind shaking, rustling branches,
    crackling steps, up and down hills,
    aching muscles, the pain of continuing
    sharp, fast inhalations
    complex dazzling snowflakes
    The path not forked
    beating its way to finality.
    Snowflakes pool on my beaded coat,
    circling and falling and dropping down,
    not penetrating.
    Thankful to the animal
    for its skin and protection.
    I am glad for everything.
    while splashing slush,
    along this path,
    Just this once.




    Submitted on 2008-01-24 23:14:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      You're expert in this verseform but I bet you haven't analyzed your use of it. However, you have enough examples to make a survey.

    Trust me, it is the best fun and helps one write! Someone else rebuked me for even suggesting it, though. I wouldn't say "trust me" to anyone under 30 ...
    | Posted on 2008-02-07 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      i really liked the images here in your poem,quite vivid descriptions of a long treck throgh a winter covered land,i,m not to sure though if you are talking about a "native" in the sense of a native american(peace pipe) or are you talking about another kind of pipe?and what about the splashing water part, you might have to explain that for me.
    thanks for sharing
    take care
    ger
    | Posted on 2008-01-25 00:00:00 | by eyeless in gaza | [ Reply to This ]


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