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    dots Submission Name: of airplanes and moviesdots
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    Author: Fadeintoreality
    Elite Ratio:    1.95 - 33/114/64
    Words: 384
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsof airplanes and moviesdots
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    frigid morning air
    the awakening of the end
    crusted eyes
    parking garages echoing
    the rumble of luggage leashed like
    a sick dog

    vibrations in my pocket

    come back.
    please come back.
    one more time.

    "what?"
    "it's nothing."

    this hug will have to last us six months.
    we've done it before, we'll do it again.
    it's just going
    to hurt.

    i wish someone would have told me they'd
    shoot a golf ball into my throat.
    next time,
    i'd appreciate some warning.

    and back to the beginning.

    flipping my phone:
    open
    closed
    open
    closed
    open
    closed

    vibrations in my hand

    OPEN

    "I can't get any service."

    but there you are.
    amongst the rumbling of luggage
    leashed like
    a sick dog.

    "SKANK!"
    I wish they would shut up.
    I love them so much.

    Quick.
    into
    the
    elevator.

    an embrace
    to last us
    only
    two
    days.

    but there's more where that came from.
    I guess we better pick a level.

    you're more beautiful than I could have ever imagined.
    ever.
    the elevator door.

    OPEN

    who knew so much planning could lead me
    into the mind of a seasoned criminal

    enter the white house at 3:40.
    Your name?
    Sam Gibson
    garner and highway 40.

    it doesn't matter.
    no amount of planning could ever spoil this pure display of
    beauty.

    every part of your body is beautiful
    i could go on and on
    with clichés and metaphors.
    but,
    things become clichés
    for a reason.

    eight times,
    i've felt the warm, salty taste
    of your tears
    staining deep into my clothes.
    i feel you convulsing in my arms.
    but i'm here to hold you down.
    please don't cry.
    look me in the eyes.

    hemp.
    necklaces.
    HEAR.
    AE.
    memories
    pictures
    kisses.
    hugs.
    cuddling.
    touching.
    romance.
    intimacy between the sheets.
    freezing.
    sweating.
    crying.
    weeping.
    movies.
    atonement.
    typewriters.
    popcorn.
    ice cream.
    driving.

    STOP!
    look me in the eye.
    we'll see each other soon enough.

    back to the end.

    vibrations in my hand.

    this hug will have to last us six months.
    we've done it before, we'll do it again.
    it's just going
    to hurt.

    and it does.

    the airplane door.
    the automatic gate.

    CLOSED




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