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    dots Submission Name: This Romantic Poem Got Me Laiddots
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    Author: azurwarrior
    ASL Info:    44/m/SoCal
    Elite Ratio:    5.03 - 86/85/63
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
    Total Views: 769
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 587



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    dotsThis Romantic Poem Got Me Laiddots
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    ESTA LUNA (TRES PARTES)

    UNO:
    The moon moans and floes sultry tonight.
    Cupid's arrows sizzle, pulsate , mesmerize.
    Leaves and wet winds blow at the stars,
    salty but sweet Eros!

    DOS:

    leaves adorned in pointed starlight,
    circling vast, aching rhythms.
    Wild, penetrating, hard and pounding
    That swelling Spring branch...

    TRES:
    Esta Luna and our lives are one.
    As it expires, we renew.
    Over and over.
    All night long.
    Till morning birds awaken.




    Submitted on 2008-01-25 16:07:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I collect Moon poems and I reckon this is is a good one!

    I wonder what human nature would have been like, in a planet without a moon??
    | Posted on 2008-02-07 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      Okay I like it. The tres partes thing is totally original. I've not seen that done before. But I don't favor it over the traditional stanzas of poetry.

    I liked the use of your words. "Esta Luna and our lives are one. As it expires, we renew."
    That's very beautiful poetry right there. God.. that's really beautiful.

    What I like about this poem is it reminds me so deeply about what passion is like and how I feel when I do it. The words are really nice.
    | Posted on 2008-01-25 00:00:00 | by Maiku Deamon | [ Reply to This ]


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