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    dots Submission Name: Ghazal for my Deceased Catdots
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    Author: azurwarrior
    ASL Info:    44/m/SoCal
    Elite Ratio:    5.03 - 86/85/63
    Words: 49
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
    Total Views: 804
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 303



    Description:
       I wrote this right after my cat Spar-kle passed away.
    If you're not a cat lover, don't read this.


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    dotsGhazal for my Deceased Catdots
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    I saw unmistakably, my deep bond with you.
    To a grave weeping, while I lift you.

    No more pain, yea this is true.
    And your earthly body was not truly you.

    You couldn't die if you weren't born too.
    The eternal shines constant. Still I miss you.




    Submitted on 2008-01-25 20:33:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'm a cat person.

    What is a ghazal? Is it a verseform? I see the rhyme rule, but the metre is interesting in this poem - is that part of the form, or is it your own feeling for the variations?
    | Posted on 2008-02-07 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]


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