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    dots Submission Name: The Perfect Touchdots
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    Author: Morsketch
    ASL Info:    21/F/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 27/26/26
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 957
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 695



    Description:
       Metaphorical. I like physiology and creepiness though, so I went for that too.


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    dotsThe Perfect Touchdots
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    Once I knew a man,
    With the perfect poker face,
    So I gently sliced it off,
    And placed it in mineís place.

    And I knew a woman,
    With the most kind and giving heart,
    So I dug out just the ventricles,
    And sewed it in, in part.

    The perfect lips Iíve tasted,
    Bit them both right off,
    Borrowed ears hence wasted,
    Meticulously doffed.

    Took the biggest eyes,
    Piercing in their gaze,
    Put them in the coffer,
    To wait these endless days,

    For the perfect body,
    And finally Iíve found such,
    Come closer darling lover,
    I hunger for your touch.




    Submitted on 2008-01-26 00:24:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this was great! Best poem I have read all night! I really like the way you done it all it was gross but beautiful at the same time.........

    Great write I would really and truly not change and thing about it!

    aNNmARIE
    | Posted on 2008-01-26 00:00:00 | by aNNmARIE | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the disembodied parts making a whole theme, wonderful job, darkly morbid....yet intoxicating. *cheers for you* The transition was a little rough (I thought) but overall it was skillfully writ, and you kept me with it to the end.

    Gloria-
    | Posted on 2008-01-26 00:00:00 | by TryingToHoldOn | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this poem a lot... It's morbid but beautiful... I wasn't expecting it to take such a dark turn so abruptly, but it definitely kept me reading! Keep it up!
    | Posted on 2008-01-26 00:00:00 | by black_beauty18 | [ Reply to This ]


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