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    dots Submission Name: Sanctity Be Free - By Stellar Totemdots
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    Author: SanctityExposed
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.98 - 48/66/40
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 606
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1058



    Description:
       This is a submission another ES member wrote for me, and I wanted everyone to see it's beauty and grandeur. Thanks again, Bryan.


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    dotsSanctity Be Free - By Stellar Totemdots
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    In memory of SanctityExposed ~ By Stellar Totem
    from Bryan to Helen


    Like forked lighting I know your soul is spread,
    and as you sleep their soundly in your bed,
    I shall conjure out of my heart,
    a portal for you to enter,
    and visit heavens afar.



    Hovering above a sea,
    of which is filled with tears of those who also weep,
    the hive of this newfound world lifts you out of your bed-sheets,
    and the planet's crystal core sings.

    Shores of blue sand, glitter brilliantly....
    You begin to flap your butterfly wings and flutter softly,
    Your haste is astounding!
    Though an entity still constrains...

    An undying energy breaks the lock and chains,
    and an influx of power rushes through your veins!
    Traveling from your nose, to you breasts, to your toes.


    And in a spark of light!
    You rocket into the distance, illuminated in a specular aura of grand-swiftness.




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