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    dots Submission Name: Nothing Seems Fine in a Pretty-How Towndots
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    Author: azurwarrior
    ASL Info:    44/m/SoCal
    Elite Ratio:    5.03 - 86/85/63
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Misc/Comedy
    Total Views: 693
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 700



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       I don't know how to end this comically...


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    dotsNothing Seems Fine in a Pretty-How Towndots
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    LISTEN:

    nothing seems fine,
    next to a red sun set,
    in a pretty how town.

    overly well seasoned Italian ladies
    swinging their legs
    on sheltered cracked porches,
    gossip their so called golden years away.
    The horrors of other peoples lives
    become set like cement
    between hairy gray ears.
    Life stinks these days,
    so get the juicy facts.
    All of it is gospel truth

    Hair is of utmost importance.
    Wrong shade, bad perms, gray hair,
    too long, too short
    the worst horrors that ever, EVER existed.
    in the sweet town
    That has gone to pot.





    Submitted on 2008-01-26 19:10:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Your poetry is very entertaining to me because I live in a country town, and have a jaundiced view of class, status and power along with being rather aloof and thinking people are funny ... your verse is rich with that feeling and so I like it!

    "Set like cement between hairy gray ears" is the best bit!

    | Posted on 2008-02-07 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      I enjoy the way you depict the shallowness of the media in this piece. It is so true, how people focus so much on the superficial and the gossip. The more things change the more they stay the same these days.

    The image of the porch was very strong. It could be in any town in the world the way it is depicted here.

    Take care.....Chris
    | Posted on 2008-01-26 00:00:00 | by colopoao | [ Reply to This ]


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