die in peace

Author: scardnscared ASL Info:    25/ DFW Elite Ratio:    3.1 - 585 /498 /311 Words: 122

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die in peace

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So long ago, my eyes they burned for you the tears were crystal blue. I guess its ok if you don't remember but to tell you the truth now. Its not. I gave up so much time for you watched you walk out of to many rooms. It wasn't fair, that I gave it all up just for something, that in the end turned into lust. For some its enough but for years I thought it was love and the lie is just to much. So take back everything and leave me with nothing. Cause these memories are bittersweet. Sorry I lied, their just bitter to me. Can you please steal or erase my memory so baby I can die in peace.

Submitted on 2008-01-26 23:42:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Really good, my favorite is - gave up so much time for you watched you walk out of to many rooms. It wasn't fair, that I gave it all up just for something, that in the end turned into lust. For some its enough but for years I thought it was love- Really good write :)

| Posted on 2011-01-25 00:00:00 | by Joybell | [ Reply to This ]

do'nt have much to say but is was very good almost made me cry.

| Posted on 2008-08-05 00:00:00 | by Kinthra | [ Reply to This ]

I like it, and it's somthing I can relate to. I wasted over two years waited for a guy that claimed to care about me, but in the end nothing really came of it. It's a pretty sucky situation but in the end it makes you stronger. I get what your saying in the poem, but I do agree that some parts of it need to be reviesed a bit.

| Posted on 2008-01-28 00:00:00 | by fallen_angel90 | [ Reply to This ]

that was flowing very nicely. i liked the words: 'take back everything and leave me with nothing.' really shows the seriosness of this situation. still think some sentences need to be revised i. e.the last three lines are not appropiate English. overall prognosis is good, keep writing!

| Posted on 2008-01-27 00:00:00 | by Sannita | [ Reply to This ]

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