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    dots Submission Name: What a beautiful romance...dots
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    Author: Priestess
    ASL Info:    21/female/usa
    Elite Ratio:    2.22 - 49/118/51
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       Sorry if its a little crappy, I haven't written anything in awhile.


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    dotsWhat a beautiful romance...dots
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    I feel your eyes on the back of my head and turn to catch your glance.
    They say theres nothing quite like fear to make a true romance.

    I see the smile on your lips and turn to walk away.
    I hear your voice across the hall, "Oh darling, cant you stay?"

    My blood rises and my heart stops as you gently grab my arm.
    I will my fearful voice to scream, but I know there's no need for alarm.
    As you slowly start to lick my ear the feeling makes me hiss.
    You turn your face to reach my mouth and then we start to kiss.

    "Your amazing," I whisper as I smile at him, then I place my head on his chest.
    "Your Incredible," he says as he kisses my hair. "No," he coos, "Your the best."




    Submitted on 2008-01-27 00:20:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This poem seems personal. Perhaps there is a special someone you like that you have written this poem for? Very lovely.

    ~Steph.
    | Posted on 2008-01-27 00:00:00 | by xXCptn_SephyXx | [ Reply to This ]


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