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    dots Submission Name: My Heart's Taledots
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    Author: black_beauty18
    ASL Info:    25/Female/Hutchinson, KS
    Elite Ratio:    4.04 - 153/146/46
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 647
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       This is a hopeful poem... Sure it conveys the pain of heartbreak and also my heart's relentless pursuit of true love, regardless of the pain it puts me through, but it also shows that all it's failures are for the ultimate good.


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    dotsMy Heart's Taledots
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    I am the guide to my host's life,
    She goes where I see fit.
    I'm the cause of unbearable strife,
    I pave the road to love's pit.

    True, I've been shattered, more than once in fact,
    But I learn from every mistake.
    I weave a love spell with precision and tact,
    Surely this time I won't break.

    And if, by chance, I'm wrong yet again,
    My host's pain will eventually subside.
    One day the love of her life will begin,
    Making worthwhile the tears that she's cried.




    Submitted on 2008-01-27 08:56:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      very emotional , a sign of deep love and harmony , a true bond with self , confidence to move on in life after heartache , passionate , great poem , keep writing , very beautiful
    | Posted on 2009-04-02 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]


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